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Society Sure Sucks - (An Outlook on Society) - WritersBeat.com

Okay iv made a new blog this is a blog but i feel it is also art . Im 13 so it may not be that great grammer. First Paragraphs Life as a human is ruled by society;

We live and act according to society’s demands. Society can cause us to act differently to situations then we really should because of simple societal norms, we have come to accept this and allow ourselves to be controlled by society’s grasp. We are slaves to the society’s ever changing values of what is right and wrong. I walk down the same road, day by day, my path never changing, my goal unclear. Society’s boundaries are confining me to a world of order and control, but this is no way to live, no way to spend my life. Order and control are needed to prevent chaos, but this control has taken my freedom by stopping me from be being myself.

Is there a balance between both?

Maybe, but with society playing its part, no. People may laugh, they may not listen, but they have been engulfed by society, and do not see beyond their lives of simple pleasures and simple actions. Why cant we have we have a life where every day is different, and not just the simple facts of when I ate this, or what lessons or job I did today?

Better that but what we see and do on much larger scales, is what I consider important. We are like one fish in a huge ocean, a number in a database, insignificant and unimportant. But we carry on living our lives without a goal, will society allow me to succeed, or will it drags me pointlessly back with simple unnecessary rules. People judge me, because of who I am, must I change for societies social morals, I am not cruel, evil or unkind, yet they see me as an enemy and an outcast of society. Just because I am not a stereotypical teen, but a stereotype is just another societal norm. People will always judge, they will judge you before you even talk, shouldn’t this its self be socially unmoral? Hope this is Writers Beat Quality ... NOT FINISHED YET

Thirteen-years-old.

Leave your computer alone and go outside and enjoy the fresh air.

Don't worry about society just yet.

Enjoy your childhood.

It's way too early for the bumpy ride.

You keep using the word 'society', but you never really define what you mean, and why it's bad.

You're basing this whole thing on the evils and corrupting nature of society, but why is society so horrible?

(I know a lot of ways it is, but you can't depend on your readers to fill in the blanks for you.) You say society rejects you because of "how you are".

How are you? Why do people hate you even though you're nice?

How has order and control taken your freedom?

Without order and control, injustice would flourish.

Do you consider someone breaking into your house and taking all your stuff a good thing?

It's an expression of their freedom, isn't it?

People getting drunk and then driving...they're exercising their freedom, but how about the family with three little kids that they crash into?

They're free to die in the emergency room.

Not free to enjoy life. Law, as it is right now (at least, in America...I'm assuming that's where you live?) is a balance of order and freedom.

We retain our natural rights (life, liberty, property, and the pursuit of happiness as long as it doesn't violate anyone else's rights), and have a few acquired rights (Medicare, 401K)...do you have any examples of the opposite? As it is...it's weak.

I know it's not finished, but you can't make these statements without having something to back it up.

Think it through a little more.

Do some reading. You don't have to conform to society.

It's a choice. Having society reject you isn't that bad if society sucks.

Originally Posted by Night Wanderer You don't have to conform to society.

I'd like to think this statement is true, but the experiences I've had with people, young and old, seem to suggest it isn't.

There is a norm set by society.

In fact, there are probably dozens, if not hundreds, of them.

We're expected to socialise.

We're expected to find that right person, settle down, and get married.

We're expected to have a job, a good home, and a couple of kids.

Depending on where we're from, we're expected to go to mass, the synagogue, etcetera. Now, if we don't do these things we're considered pariahs -- outcasts, if you will.

In fact, some people have even been ostracised for doing things differently.

That's a horrid fact of life.

Just take a look at goths, homosexuals, atheists -- they're all condemned by the Catholic Church, and for what?

Being different? Being open-minded?

It's come to the point where it's safer to conform -- or a least pretend to -- to society's norms.

We don't have to, of course.

No one has to do anything.

But it may be in our best interests to do so. Sorry for getting OT.

I didn't say what would happen if you didn't. Having society reject you isn't that bad if society sucks.

Well im going to be editing it obviously but this is i guese the frame work .

When you take your age into account, it's really pretty good...I have a 13-year-old brother, and he couldn't write something like this.

Everyone's different, but I suppose he's sort of what I use for a gauge.

Edited and added my new paragraph

Um...where's the new paragraph?

I didn't see it...

For a thirteen year old this is good especially since you have this outlook on society.

I also have some of the same thoughts as you do on society. I think you need to elaborate more on what 'society' you are talking about.

Is it American society?

Europoean society?

Knowing what society makes a HUGE difference because each country's society is different. I do like this piece but I suggest you refine it more and elaborate.

I feel like you could add some more detail into it.

I am still amazed that a 13 year old has such a dark and grim outlook on society but I was like that as well when I was that age.

I still am especially on American society, it often keeps me up at night but anyways...nice writing.

I hope you can take this criticism with a grain of salt. It's actually pretty good for your age.

I say that because it is a mix of philosophy and anti-social vagueness.

Again, due to your age, which is no insult.

When I was younger, it was always easy to say "They".

"That country", "that society", etc.

As I get older, I sound more like a lawyer, dancing around the object: "A portion of the populace in that country, who follow this belief system," etc ad naseaum. Also, you are influenced, probably, by school, where they lock in a bunch of kids and expect that everything will work out fine.

Where the "demos" (people) are a fluid bunch and even a rumor can send the mob after you and/or against you.

Once free of school and people, shockingly, don't give a rat's butt about you or your beliefs or actions..

Its a Faustian wish.

Now you can do much of what you want, but now nobody cares. Its like becoming finally becoming a talented actor, but nobody is watching anymore. Hope that makes sense to you.

Keep writing. Try to take criticism for what it really is: somebody taking their time, which is valuable to them, to read your stuff, try to understand it and then try to offer adjustments to your direction. Good job.

Not bad! I sense a lot of angst in the background.

Trouble with others.

That is natural for the age, really.

Not a bad piece, but what you would expect if you asked adolescents about their thoughts.

Well, the ones that aren't in the limelight and their parents bought them a new mustang, etc. Keep it up!

Funny how a car or some other exspensive toy seems to quell that angst.




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